Talk:Serena Mioré/@comment-4530944-20111023143959/@comment-71.201.224.97-20111023162310

You've fixed it very well. :3

Also, be aware she couldn't exactly keep it hidden. What Kex once had was a disorder has now become an insanity twisted and destroyed by multiple magical tamperings and other shenanigans in his mind, eventually turning him into an uncurable monster. However, at the point where it WAS a simple disorder, there was no way for people to not notice. These personalities aren't just different traits, they're different people ENTIRELY. Kex and Lucas are two COMPLETELY different people, one created by the darkest most unfathomable parts of Lucas's mind. They'd often have different names, traits, backstories, etc. Also, note someone WITH the disorder has NO idea they have it. When Kex had the simple disorder, Lucas was unaware of Kex, and Kex was unaware of Lucas. Basically, what I'm saying is, you make it look like one person having a TON of mood swings, more than a person with other personalities. Also, what I feel the need to stress is...if you want a combat orientated character, you shouldn't have picked this particular disorder. Personalities swap roughly around every ten minutes, and at random. With the headaches that come, plus unable to remember what the other personality was doing, more times then not during a fight Serena would change personalities, have NO idea what's going on, plus being unable to focus due to the hazey thoughts and harsh headache, and she'd be cut down almost instantly. The only reason my character ever made it as a fighter with the disorder was unorthodoxed drugs, mental tamperings, and rough torture methods. With this disorder, she'd also be extremely emotionally, mentally, and physically unstable, probably unable to man an assassin organization. I'm not telling you this to rofl-swat your clan into the dust, but both in lore and by actual sciences and medicine, a lot of this just doesn't add up.