Talk:Lierla/@comment-4536066-20121024045302

A couple of glaring points stand out to me which you might want to consider. Some are about lore conflicts that you should clarify and others are just suggestions to be taken lightly. I will preface them with this quote from the Runescape Wiki...

"Sometime in the Fourth Age, the elves broke into two separate groups. Some elves wanted to continue following Seren, whilst others wanted to summon a "Dark Lord", who many believe to be Zamorak but could possibly be Zaros or a previously unknown deity. Thus started the civil war." So, the points are,


 * Why does this character follow Saradomin? I know she was taught about him by the philosopher, but that doesn't really explain why an elf would convert to a human god. Seren doesn't interact directly with the surface anymore, but neither does Saradomin. In addition, Seren is still the spirit of the Anima Mundi and very present in the world of Elves.

* It's unlikely that her father was a resident of the village Lletya, like you said. Lletya is a rebel lodge for the followers of Seren mentioned in the quote above, and wasn't founded until long after the civil war drove the elves out of Priffdinas - which didn't happen until well into the Fourth Age, since after it started Baxtorian had to march an entire army to Tirranwn, fail, get driven out, and the rebels to scrounge together enough resources to form a home base (Lletya).


 * You namedrop a bunch of people like Ttocs and Yrneh Drof, but give almost no background on who these individuals were or what role they played in her life aside from "she interacted with them at some point." Comes off as just listing names to say, "she knew a bunch of people who were good at stuff."

* She spoke to Guthix? What? She's a Saradominist, remember? Why would a god she doesn't follow (who went back to sleep after the end of the third age, before she was born) be speaking to her?

* If she has a piece of the Stone of Jas, why is there no mention of her being constantly assaulted by dragonkin?

* You might want to explain the connection she had with her father more. Were they just so close, emotionally, that she knew how to find him on instinct, or did they actually have some sort of tangible magical bond (if so, you should go into detail)?

Otherwise, interesting bio.